I'm not going to rate this as I packed it in at about the 25% mark. The MC's dialogue consists of a steady stream of what he considers to be hilarious wisecracks. They're not, especially given his age & profession. But that would have been ok as we all have different takes on humour.
What did me in were comments such as describing a female detective's breasts as ripe melons & his helpful tips on how she could lose a few pounds. Add in some completely implausible actions & I'm done. I'll leave it to other more intrepid readers to find out who-dun-it. Next!
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